Well, you have done some "proper horror" here. This chapter is quite a bit more gory than part 1, but what can one expect with rotten meat and septic feet (rhymes; another good band name?)). The description of the dying-then-dead hobo was nasty and graphic as could be as was our glimpse of Johnny's butchered friend.
Yeeps. Beautifully written, Jon. You really know your stuff, and I admire that. Too grisly and gory for me, however. I am such a chicken-hearted, lacy-pants. Always have been...
Oh dear, I am sorry Sharron. I could certainly make the header read a bit stronger. I deliberately want some graphic gore in there though. I think the violence of racism is often veiled and described in euphemisms, which makes it much more seductive to people flirting on the fringes of these movements. I wanted to cut through that. And I wanted to write some proper horror too, of course 😁
Oh no, Jon! I think your plan is absolutely spot on! It needs to be graphic and shocking to drop the veils, as you say. It may be the best way to help people open their eyes. I meant no criticism - other than to myself for being lily-livered.
Well, you have done some "proper horror" here. This chapter is quite a bit more gory than part 1, but what can one expect with rotten meat and septic feet (rhymes; another good band name?)). The description of the dying-then-dead hobo was nasty and graphic as could be as was our glimpse of Johnny's butchered friend.
Yeeps. Beautifully written, Jon. You really know your stuff, and I admire that. Too grisly and gory for me, however. I am such a chicken-hearted, lacy-pants. Always have been...
Oh dear, I am sorry Sharron. I could certainly make the header read a bit stronger. I deliberately want some graphic gore in there though. I think the violence of racism is often veiled and described in euphemisms, which makes it much more seductive to people flirting on the fringes of these movements. I wanted to cut through that. And I wanted to write some proper horror too, of course 😁
Oh no, Jon! I think your plan is absolutely spot on! It needs to be graphic and shocking to drop the veils, as you say. It may be the best way to help people open their eyes. I meant no criticism - other than to myself for being lily-livered.